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With NaNoWriMo coming up, I thought this would be a great time to post some writing tips and tricks! 🙂 Of course I’m certainly not a professional writer, and I make these very same mistakes all the time. I’m simply sharing some tips and suggestions that I hope will help you and me to improve our writing. 🙂 (BE WARNED: This is a veeery long post! XD )
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The “how to be invisible” part of my title comes from this essay I wrote for school. I’ve added a few notes, but otherwise pretty much left it as it is. I’ll probably refer to this in the rest of the post.
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How to Be Invisible: A Writer’s Guide to More Natural Storytelling
You’re absorbed in a story when an awkward phrase or a misplaced word brings you up short. Was that a mistake, or did you just skip a sentence? Now you have to back up, get a head start, and read the passage all over again. The author has spoiled the paragraph by coming out of hiding, by becoming too “visible.” The best authors are masters of invisibility.
What do I mean by “invisibility?” Simply this: a good author allows the story to take the stage; he avoids self-conscious, unnatural words that highlight his voice instead of his characters’. The reader should be able to immerse himself in a book without being distracted by a misplaced word, a grammar error, or a clumsy sentence.
How does one become invisible? These three tips will get you started.
Technical errors like grammar mistakes, misspelled words, and faulty punctuation are widely recognized as mistakes – and for a good reason. Even a subtle misspelling will throw the reader off. Indeed, using a real but misplaced word is sometimes more arresting than an obvious typo. “Defiantly” instead of “definitely,” “aloud,” instead of “allowed,” “breath” instead of “breathe”… Do these look familiar?
Sometimes you can achieve invisibility in more subtle ways. “Said” and its alternatives are a good example of this. On the one hand, if you use “said” all the time, your dialogue drags, but on the other hand, using anything but “said” makes your dialogue sound unnatural. [I’ve especially noticed the second option in blogging world. 😀 ] Both styles bring the author to the front instead of the characters. Let’s take the former error first:
“I won’t,” she said.
“Jane,” he said,” I am going to win this argument if it kills me!”
“You won’t,” she said.
“Then do I have to break out the tickling squad?” he said.
Jane backed away. “You don’t,” she said.
Yuck. Now let’s look at the second error:
“I won’t!” she cried.
“Jane,” he exclaimed fiercely, “I am going to win this argument if it kills me!”
“You won’t,” she replied calmly.
“Then do I have to break out the tickling squad?” he queried threateningly.
Jane backed away. “You don’t,” she murmured.
Still no good. The writer has tried to avoid “said” at all costs, resulting in an affected and adverb-ridden conversation. So how do we strike a balance? The solution is to use both options. Don’t be afraid to use “said” once in a while – it provides some white-space for the reader. But be sure to add dynamic verbs and gerund phrases as well, as long as you don’t overload them with adverbs.
A third common error is using too many adjectives, particularly in opening sentences: [Again, I often see this in blogging world. 😉 I tend to do this too. It’s just so tempting to describe with all of those luscious words! But that can lead to…]
“She brushed her luxurious, raven black hair from her delicate face with a slender hand, and pulled the thin gray sweater close around her shivering body. Her steel blue eyes anxiously searched the clouded gray sky for something that would never return…” All those adjectives clutter up the sentences and make them sound unnatural. Instead of hearing the character’s voice, you hear the author self-consciously spouting forth flowery language.
How do you fix this? The best idea is to scatter these description throughout the opening paragraphs, or even pages. You don’t have to exhaustively describe your character or the setting in the first sentence. [GASP! I know, right?] Let the reader get to know your character gradually, feeding them bite- sized descriptive tidbits instead of forcing down a whole chunk at once.
Becoming an invisible author isn’t easy, but it can be done. Scour your writing for any grammatical mistakes or awkward style formations that push you and your writing to the front instead of your characters. With a critical eye and some practice, your readers won’t even know you’re there.
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So basically what I mean by invisibility is writing your story naturally, so your readers will hear your character’s voice instead of yours. Here are a few other tips for invisibility. 🙂
Sentence Variation:
I often struggle with this because it’s so easy to find a rhythm and use the same pattern. Maybe you write in short declarative sentences or two-clause sentences, or really loooong sentences. Whatever you always do, don’t. Sentence variation saves the reader from monotony and death-from-boredom. In general, I like to use two or three clause sentences for the most part, scatter long sentences occasionally, and use short declarative sentences for emphasis. Don’t underestimate the power of a well-placed short sentence! It stops you cold. (See there?)
Clutter:
It’s amazing how many words you can prune from a piece of writing. I’m reading William Zinsser’s On Writing Well for school, and he suggests using brackets to burn through clutter. Put brackets around all words, sentences, and even paragraphs that seem unnecessary, then read through your story again, skipping over the bracketed sections. You can always keep the bracketed words if your story needs them, but you might be surprised at how many words you can clip away! Don’t save a word merely for its sophisticated sound.
Tone:
Make sure to keep a consistent tone throughout your book. Yeah yeah, everyone knows that. But seriously, it’s a very important part of invisibility! 😛 Let me give you a few examples of what I mean.
Tone can be especially tricky in first person POV. Your main character is telling the story, so make sure it’s natural. (I definitely have trouble with this myself.) If you were the narrator, would you describe yourself as having “luxurious raven black hair”, to use our previous example? Depending on your character’s personality, you might, but personally I would feel rather awkward saying that. XD (Plus it’s not true – as you can see from my profile picture. XD ) It’s too poetic – it fits better in third person POV when you as the author are more removed from the story, and talking of a person other than yourself.
Another thing to watch for is the tone of individual words. If your story has a more serious tone or is set in a timeless or older setting, using modern words like wacky, fake, weirdo, etc. will temporarily destroy the mood you’ve created for the reader. This also goes for materials and objects. If your character lives in a Medieval-Age world where they fight with bow-and-arrows, ride horses, and live in thatched houses, please don’t use modern inventions like plastic, computers, or paved highways (that is, unless your setting is only partly Medieval). Nope, not a good idea.
Miscellaneous But Useful Tidbits:
Redundant Words: If your character is holding a knife, you don’t need to say that it’s “sharp” unless you have previously told the reader otherwise. If your character feels like dancing in the rain, don’t describe the experience as “wet.” Unless the reader is a hermit who lives in a desert and thinks “knife” is that bug that keeps crawling into their bed at night, they can figure out that information on their own. 😉
“Several minutes:” I’ve probably used this several times in my writing, but if you really think about it, this phrase doesn’t make sense. If you met someone and “we stared at each other fearfully for a few minutes,” that would be extremely awkward. Most of the time you should change this phrase to “several moments” or “a few moments.”
Two-clause “and” sentences: I learned this helpful little tip in grammar a few years ago. If you have a two-part sentence where the subject doesn’t change and where the two clauses are connected by the word “and,” you don’t need to separate them with a comma. Okay, that was kind of confusing, so let me give you an example.
Wrong: John eagerly nodded his head, and gave her a brilliant smile.
Right: John eagerly nodded his head and gave her a brilliant smile.
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Phew! That was a loooong post! But I hope that was helpful, at least a little bit! Do you have any writing tips?
***Allison***
“Unless the reader is a hermit who lives in a desert and thinks “knife” is that bug that keeps crawling into their bed at night, they can figure out that information on their own.” HAHA! XD I always enjoy your posts…. 😛
This was really helpful! I think about this kind of thing a lot but I’ve never thought of it as being “invisible” before. 😀
-Clara ❤
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XD I had fun with that sentence. XD Aww, thanks!
Thanks so much, Clara! Yeah! 😀
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This is really, really good! Being invisible is a really good way to put it. I’d never thought of it like that! (At first I was thinking, Invisible pens? Not let your writing go public? Wha?)
Love these tips!
On the “Said” topic, one thing I also do, is (if there are only two people or if it is DEFINITELY understood who’s talking) sometimes the “[whoever] said”, isn’t necessary.
~Gracie
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Aww, thank you soooo much, Gracie! Ha ha! XD
Oh yes, that’s a great tip. That really helps make you “invisible.” 😀
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This was a great post, Allison! You made so many great points and I’ll definitely be looking back on these! Thank you! 😀
~Jaclynn~
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Wow, thank you, Jaclynn! I’m so glad to hear that!
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Not too long at all! And very useful information, especially to those of us new to blogging (me!). Thank you!!
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Oh, phew! Thank you so very much!
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This was an awesome post! Great job on it! I definitely understand a lot of these points and see them done wrongly all of the time! 😀 I’m guilty of them sometimes, too… 😉 Thanks for such a helpful post!
-Emma-
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Thank you super much, Emma! Yeah! ♥
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Reblogged this on autorenabenteuer and commented:
nützlich für meine überarbeitungsphase. vielleicht auch für dich?
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Aww, thank you so much!
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I love this post! The best advice for dialogue tags I’ve gotten for that it to replace them with action beats when you can. 🙂
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Thank you soooo much, Josie! Ooh, and thanks for the tip!
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This is super helpful! Thank youu! ^^
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Wow, thank you so much! I’m very glad it was!
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You know that last part at the end of your post about the comma before AND, well sometimes I’ve seen it with a comma and sometimes I’ve seen it without a comma. So I’m confused. Anyway this was really helpful! 😊
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Yeah, I’ve seen it both ways as well. It could be that it’s just a common mistake, but it could be that I was wrong. 😉 The main thing is the sentence has to have ONE subject – if you wrote “John eagerly nodded his head, and she gave him a brilliant smile. You would need a comma because there’s two subjects: John and “she.” Also, you have to use a comma when you restate the subject. (Maybe I should add this to my post.) So if you said, “John eagerly nodded his head, and he gave her a brilliant smile,” you have to add a comma because you restate “John” as “he.” Okay, that seems really confusing. XD But mainly, try it without the comma and see if it sounds okay. 😉
Thank you so much, Sylvia! I’m really glad it was!
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You know what? I’m not precisely sure of that last part about restating the subject. That’s what sounds right to me, and I thought I had learned that somewhere, but it could just be me… But yeah, the first example I’m pretty sure was right because I got it out of a grammar book. 😀
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I have to say I’m not sure that you don’t put a comma between those two. I am certainly not a master on the art of using commas, but the way my mom puts commas by the dozens to fix my writing, I usually put a comma there if I’m not sure. And usually, my mom doesn’t take it out. 😀 So, I kind of think that if there is an ‘and’, there probably is a comma. (Unless it’s separating things in a list: Allison and CutePolarBear) That’s my thoughts on it. And I believe my mom. 😛
CutePolarBear
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Thanks for your thoughts, CutePolarBear! Hmm, this is tricky. Does anyone else have tips about this?
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I think that the rule is, if could be two full sentences, then use a comma, if not, then don’t. “John eagerly nodded his head, and he gave her a brilliant smile” could be “John eagerly nodded his head. He gave her a brilliant smile.” and then the other way, “John eagerly nodded his head and gave her a brilliant smile” can’t be “John eagerly nodded his head. Gave her a brilliant smile.”
I’m pretty sure that’s what I learned from my grammar book.
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Yeah, I agree. Another way to look at it is DON’T use a comma when joining an independent clause to a dependent clause, but DO use a comma when joining two independent clauses.
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Agreed! 🙂
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Thanks for clearing that up for me! 😊
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You’re entirely welcome. 🙂
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This was so good, Allison! I really liked it. 🙂
♥Megan
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Aww, yay! Thanks so much, Megan!
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Reblogged this on A Barefoot Gal and commented:
My sister just wrote a really great post about writing. I know there are a lot of writers that follow me, so this post might be helpful for you! 🙂
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Aww, thank you, Sis! 😀
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Great post! You’re an awesome writer, so I should take your advice! 😀
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Thanks, Sara! Aww, thank you sooo much! ♥ I’m learning!
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You’re SO WELCOME! You really ARE an amazing writer! The Dust Pixies is such a great series!
*voice changes to whisper* Any clues on the Guestbook case?
LOL!
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Aww, thank you! ❤
Ha ha, nope, I'm afraid I have nothing to report. XD
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Too bad…
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This is so helpful, Allison! I usually write in third person and it’s definitely crucial to stay invisible. Thanks for the tips! 😀
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Thanks so much, Grace! My pleasure. 🙂
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Aww, thanks so much!
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You are welcome..
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Are you kidding, Allison!? That was GREAT! I loved it a LOT! 🙂 Not too long at ALL! 😛 XD haha! I read it all. And I really liked it! 🙂 A lot of great information there. I’ve figured out (and still am! ;)) that it sounds bad to use someones name over and over again- or even she she she she over and over! 🙂 Like:
Lu was going to go to school. Lu couldn’t. Lu was sick. Lu didn’t want to stay in bed, so Lu went to-
Okay, you get the point! then:
Lu was going to go to school. She couldn’t, because she was sick. She didn’t want to stay in bed, so she went downstairs so that she could find something that she could do.
Or:
Lu was going to go to school…but then she couldn’t, because she didn’t feel good. But since Lu didn’t want to stay in bed, she headed downstairs to find something to do.
Still doesn’t sound great- but it’s better! 😉 😛
~K.A~ GREAT post- I’ll have to keep an eye out for some of these writing things while I’m doing NaNo!
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Thanks so much, K. A.! Oh yeah, that’s a great tip! Very true. Thanks again!
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no problemo! 🙂
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Great post, Allison! I learned a lot from this post and I know you guys will too! 😊
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Aww, thanks so much, Rutvi!
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Noice tips! ~Mya
P.S. Yes, I just said “noice”. Try saying nice that way. It’s fun!
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Thanks!
P. S. Ha ha! At first I was like, “What?!”, but now I get it. XD Yeah, that’s fun!
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LOL! That’s what I thought when my friend first said it to me! She will be proud.😂👏🏻😊
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XD
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Very helpful tips.
Thank you.
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Aww, thank YOU! I’m glad to hear that!
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Thank you for sharing
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You’re entirely welcome! 😀
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👍🏼
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Thank you for writing such an absolutely amazing post, Allison! I have this bookmarked in two places so I can return to it at anytime. You have so many incredible tips that will help me so very much! Thank you again!
•Madison•
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Wow. Thank YOU so, incredibly much, Madi! It makes me soooo happy that you found it helpful! 😀 😀 😀 You’re entirely welcome!
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Aw, you’re welcome! 😀 😀
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Very thoughtful post. Thank you for sharing!
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You’re quite welcome! Thank YOU!
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It is very useful, but I noticed some spelling mistakes in the paragraph you mentioned it. See?
Sometimes you can achieve invisibility in more subtle ways. “Said” and it’s alternatives are a good example of this. On the one hand, if you use “said” al the time, your dialogue drags, but o the other hand, using anything but “said” makes your dialogue sound unnatural. [I’ve especially noticed the second option in blogging world. ] Both styles bring the author to the front instead of the characters. Let’s take the former error first:
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Heh heh, thanks. 😉 I shall go fix them!
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Why thank you!
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